don't know if Romeo already fixed it, but alot of those smaller paragraph's can be pull into others to make a bigger one. ALOT of comma use...too much I'd venture to say.

Also, just a known fact....I did not see any, but remove the word "that" from papers...English professors hate the word. Also, "isn't" = "is not" just go back and re check it and spell each word out. Also, are you following MLA guidelines? if so, you might want to re-do your works cited.