SOMEONE PROOF READ MY PAPER!!! PLEASE...

[LiL PaKi]

Can someone please proofread my paper that is attached... I need it within the next hour... thanks!!!

Highlight and post errors or think you can extend this paper... it's suppose to be 8-10pages.. i only have like 7 1/2....

[Nemesis]

You have way too many spaces in between paragraphs, and I see a good bit of comma rule errors.

[LiL PaKi]

You have way too many spaces in between paragraphs, and I see a good bit of comma rule errors.

I was going to change the extra space btw paragraphs after I figured out how to extend the essay a bit more but hmmm.. thanks.. yea I hate comma rules ... thats why I like to use dots(..) see... haha..

[Nismo]

You know I got it to 8 pages, then I deleted it because I dont even know you.

[Nemesis]

Is this a college paper?

[B16a2 Civic]

how much you payin us to proof read this shit?

[LiL PaKi]

yup college... my prof. is psycho she made us do community service and the entire year our essays were on our experiences there....

[Nismo]

You should be able to get 8 pages easy then, if you have had all year to do it.

[LiL PaKi]

how much you payin us to proof read this shit?

haha I offered $100 to actually do this yesterday but only one person seriously offered to do it but then decided they wern't capable of doing it...

I can't pay anyone to proofread.. come on do it out of a sense of goodness from the bottom of your hearts....

[turbowrx]

He was tending to the wound in the kitchen when a man and woman who reside at the duplex came home and surprised him, Harr said. Richardson allegedly got into a struggle with the couple, and he was stabbed by a pocket knife the woman was carrying before fleeing on foot. “He may be injured, we do not know to what extent,” Harr SAID. “The residents are fine. They were a little surprised.” Authorities said Richardson knew the address because a letter had been mailed to him from there while he was incarcerated. The couple did not know Richardson, but one of their friends may be familiar with him, Harr SAID. Later in the day, another resident in the area came home to find Richardson at their home. While deputies were at the residence, a 911 call came in about a suspicious person in the area, SAID Sheriff’s Department spokeswoman Stacey Kelley. Officers set up a perimeter and a Gwinnett police K-9 found Richardson’s trail, Kelley SAID.

Try to edit that a little with fewer - SAID's -

[B16a2 Civic]

haha I offered $100 to actually do this yesterday but only one person seriously offered to do it but then decided they wern't capable of doing it...

I can't pay anyone to proofread.. come on do it out of a sense of goodness from the bottom of your hearts....

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[Nismo]

I gots to get paid!

[LiL PaKi]

You should be able to get 8 pages easy then, if you have had all year to do it.

well this is the last of the 3 essays.. and each essay we weren't aware of what it was about till like 2 weeks before it was due ... i dunno what happend... trust me I know what time management and responsiblity is...english is def. not my subject thats why i put it off till my junior year... I made it to my Junior year in college with a 3.5 GPA, while working M-F, receiving scholarships, and still having a social life... it's just that I dont know what happend... I lost hope in alot of things and school ended up being the last thing...

Help... $100

[Tiff-O-Bitties]

I refuse... I actually do my homework on time.. you should try it. It makes it a lot easier on you when it's due.

[LiL PaKi]

You know I got it to 8 pages, then I deleted it because I dont even know you.

well.. get to know me and retype it... haha j/k

[v3rd1g0]

man english 1102. i had it easy all we wrote about was movies :-D

[LiL PaKi]

He was tending to the wound in the kitchen when a man and woman who reside at the duplex came home and surprised him, Harr said. Richardson allegedly got into a struggle with the couple, and he was stabbed by a pocket knife the woman was carrying before fleeing on foot. “He may be injured, we do not know to what extent,” Harr SAID. “The residents are fine. They were a little surprised.” Authorities said Richardson knew the address because a letter had been mailed to him from there while he was incarcerated. The couple did not know Richardson, but one of their friends may be familiar with him, Harr SAID. Later in the day, another resident in the area came home to find Richardson at their home. While deputies were at the residence, a 911 call came in about a suspicious person in the area, SAID Sheriff’s Department spokeswoman Stacey Kelley. Officers set up a perimeter and a Gwinnett police K-9 found Richardson’s trail, Kelley SAID.

Try to edit that a little with fewer - SAID's -

Thanks.

[Romeyo07]

in the process of editing....man who wrote this for you?

[LiL PaKi]

in the process of editing....man who wrote this for you?

thanks... I wrote it last night

[Romeyo07]

done and done...where's my money?!?

[Romeyo07]

you can tell where you stopped writing and where you cited books....

[LiL PaKi]

you can tell where you stopped writing and where you cited books....

yea thats were I got tired .. but, THANKS SOO MUCH I REALLY APPRECIATE IT!!!!!

[AznTraitor]

don't know if Romeo already fixed it, but alot of those smaller paragraph's can be pull into others to make a bigger one. ALOT of comma use...too much I'd venture to say.

Also, just a known fact....I did not see any, but remove the word "that" from papers...English professors hate the word. Also, "isn't" = "is not" just go back and re check it and spell each word out. Also, are you following MLA guidelines? if so, you might want to re-do your works cited.

[RandomGuy]

yea thats wHere I got tired .. but, THANKS SOO MUCH I REALLY APPRECIATE IT!!!!!

blahahah

[Romeyo07]

yea thats were I got tired .. but, THANKS SOO MUCH I REALLY APPRECIATE IT!!!!!

You were offering $100 bux to make it, how about a coupon or something for cleaning it up? Shoot, wash my car or something.

jk, but if you feel inclined to do any of the above, pm me. k thanks

[LiL PaKi]

Professor bought my excuse but counted the paper "late" ... since it was late I made a B in the class... at least she accepted it and didn't fail me because of it.

Turn in on time= A in class... it's ok... GPA didn't move much though...