Need constructive criticism

[quickdodge®]

“Four.”

Quotes are not needed unless this was vocalized in the story. If it was to be spoken, you need to follw or precede it with whomever stated it. If it was a thought, then the quotes still aren't needed, but it needs to go back to who thought it.

She had watched him slowly shuffle around the kitchen opening all the drawers looking for just he right utensil.

I'm not sure here, but I think there may need to be a comma or two in this sentence. Like maybe after the word kitchen and maybe drawers. Also, I don't know if this was just typo for this post, but I'm guessing at the end of the sentence it' supposed to be THE right utensil?

wiggling.

Wriggling might be a better word here.

Her mother never said a word after he flung open the door and pointed the gun in our faces. Never screamed, almost as if she was accepting her fate. Beth would never understand her mother’s lack of contest, but would also never try and think about it. Beth soon realized that was easier said than done. He pulled out the new roll of Duck brand duct tape and told us it was just to keep us out of the way. It was one of many lies he told her that day.

Ok, here you've switched back and forth from a couple of perspectives. You started off in third person possessive (her) then, in the same sentence, you went to first person possessive (our). If I remember correctly, you need to stay in one perspective.

Her wrists throbbed from THE bracelet her mother was wearing.

Added the bold word.

Nina was six and still crouched behind the big maroon and green striped chair in the living room.

Nina, six, was crouched behind....... I think that sounds/reads better. When you have a compound verb, both verbs should be the same type; like action.

and into the Officer’s living room.

I don't think "officer" is to be capitalized in this instance. he's not being addressed as an officer, only referred to as one.

These are my only points I see to comment on. Pretty cool story, too. Later, QD.