SUMMER POEM...

[BABY J]

I am kinda sensitive about my craft - but I want to know what you guys think about this. I wrote this over the last few summers and I finally got it finished.

[Sammich]

shits got potential dude..i've never written a more true heart warming poem in my life..definitely better maya angelou

[81911SC]

I like the wide vocabulary and use of stentance structure. The underlying meaning is a nice touch as well. Overall great story, Mr. Frost.

[BABY J]

** whew **

I was beginning to think that younger audiences would not understand all the play on words... and maybe my delivery was a bit slow. But those are the chances that we artists take when we live on the edge.

[Sammich]

u must live on the edge, u must
if u dnt u will live, in the dust

[Ran]

Required Reading Grades 4-6

[BABY J]

My next poem is entitled: "George Bush and Paris Hilton"

and the poem reads:

"Ummmm. No."

It's for a more mature audience.

[Sammich]

i cnt wait to read that one or even the winter poem ur going to have comin out..u r goin to have one right?

[BABY J]

Yeah - winter poem reads:

"OMG! STFU! GTFO"

[Sammich]

now thats deeper than pamela andersons....

[RISKYB]

damn good, i agree

[BABY J]

[BluesClues]

Just wow! That's some deep shit dude. Like it took me a minute. I had to get deep into thought and see how I could relate this to my life at the moment in order to understand. Way deeper than that shit they have you read in school

[amberghini]

I really like the imagery, it helps the reader visualize the poem. Great play on words too. You've found your calling.

[BABY J]

Thanx every1 for the support. I am gonna write a movie script next to expand on my skillset.

1st scene:

Blues Clues naked

* enter J'son, naked *

* kissing, rubbing, moaning *

fade to black

2nd Scene:

Blues smoking a cigarette w/ fucked up hair and a smile.

** roll credits **