Here is my redo. Never use short words such as I'm (Actually, anything with an apostrophe). Spell out all numbers and use as few commas as possible. I just worked with you had. I didnt wanna go as far as adding extra stuff, just edited what you alredy had. Enjoy
Hello,
My name is Kyle Beavers. I am twenty-three years old and I am originally from the Blue Ridge area of Georgia. I am currently working in Atlanta at Ace Dental Software as a software technician. I handle a majority of the incoming calls where I take care of customers questions and concerns. I also am responsible for packaging and shipping of our product.
I am eager to learn more about the position you have available. I feel as if I can be a vital part of your team. I can be reached via the email and phone numbers listed below. I hope to hear from you soon.
Thank you for your time.
Kyle Beavers
Email:
[email protected]
Phone: 706-455-8270
Originally Posted by Bus Driver J
Here is my redo. Never use short words such as I'm (Actually, anything with an apostrophe). Spell out all numbers and use as few commas as possible. I just worked with you had. I didnt wanna go as far as adding extra stuff, just edited what you alredy had. Enjoy
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