proof read and revise....

[PRO®]

Here is my redo. Never use short words such as I'm (Actually, anything with an apostrophe). Spell out all numbers and use as few commas as possible. I just worked with you had. I didnt wanna go as far as adding extra stuff, just edited what you alredy had. Enjoy


Hello,

My name is Kyle Beavers. I am twenty-three years old and I am originally from the Blue Ridge area of Georgia. I am currently working in Atlanta at Ace Dental Software as a software technician. I handle a majority of the incoming calls where I take care of customers questions and concerns. I also am responsible for packaging and shipping of our product.

I am eager to learn more about the position you have available. I feel as if I can be a vital part of your team. I can be reached via the email and phone numbers listed below. I hope to hear from you soon.

Thank you for your time.

Kyle Beavers
Email: [email protected]
Phone: 706-455-8270

i thought the "rule" is to spell out numbers that are less than 10, or to spell out one word numbers, but not two word numbers...i.e. twenty, 21, 22, thirty, etc.

[Bus Driver J]

i thought the "rule" is to spell out numbers that are less than 10, or to spell out one word numbers, but not two word numbers...i.e. twenty, 21, 22, thirty, etc.

hmmmm, you may be right on that one