WOOOOOOOOT!! Done!!!!!

[IndianStig]

WOOT! Im done with it....

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I am done with my essay. Please proof read it. I don;t give a shit if its incorrect, just check grammar.

+1 for any help.


essay:


In the 1800’s the abolitionist movement was extremely strong, a key factor in the argument against slavery was the first hand narrative’s written by the actual slaves. Olaudah Equiano’s account of his treacherous voyage from the Western Coast of Africa to the Caribbean Island of Barbados is one such narrative that realizes the savagery of slavery. Abolitionists used narratives of all sorts to further their argument for the freedom of slaves. A personal account of the scents, sights, and stories abroad the ships.
Olaudah Equiano’s narrative details many of the hardships that are experienced in the voyage on a cramped ship for 6000 miles. “The Stench of the hold while we were on the coast was so intolerably loathsome, that it was dangerous to remain there for any time,” (p. 45). This extremely powerful exert from Equainos narrative describes the harsh conditions under the deck on the ships that carried over 300 slaves in an area no larger then a medium sized apartment. Conditions such as these are not fit for any humans; humans have a basic right to live in proper conditions that are self controlled. Treating a fellow human being, whether it is a citizen of a poverty stricken country or me, as if he were a “good” is unforgivable by any religion in the land.
Throughout the journey, the white crewman teased and tormented the helpless slaves as it they were animals, somehow lesser in creation. “One day they had taken a number of fishes; and when they killed and satisfied themselves with as many as they thought fit, to our astonishment who were on the deck, rather then give any of them to us to eat, as we expected, they tossed the remaining fish into the sea again,” (p.46) The cruelty exhibited by these crewmen is absolute heresy. These actions are not evened exhibited in modern prisons. “…although begged and prayed for some as well as we could, but in vain; and some of my country men, being pressed by hunger took an opportunity, when they thought no one saw them, of trying to get a little privately; but they were discovered, and the attempt procured them some very severe floggings.” (p.46) Such torments are inhumane, corrupt and savage. To treat a starved, helpless person in such a manner is far below the standards of a developed society such as the Americas.
The life on board these ships was one filled with misery and heartbreak, with loved ones dieing without any sort of health care and people soon turned to suicide attempts over such a morbid life. In one case, two fellow slaves, chained together in an attempt to keep them under control, jumped overboard, following by example, another man jumped overboard. However, this man was not so lucky, as to escape this hell; he was recaptured and received severe beatings for his anarchy. The crewmen saw nothing of these humans, they only symbolized profit. If they invested less money on the well being of the individual slaves, and focused on having a large amount of slaves, then they could maximize their gross profits. They largely went for quantity over quality, starving the slaves of basic nutrition for days on end, then beating those whom were on their death beds and begging for food.
The slave developed such a fear, “of the cruelty of the whites.” (p.45) When they landed at Bridgetown, such a feeling was instilled upon them that, “We thought by this, we should be eaten by these ugly men,” With such savagery had the slaves been treated, that cannibalism seemed the next step to the ruination of a humane society. Through the eyes of an abolitionist, any such example proves the evils of slave trade, the political incorrectness that is slavery, the problem to which the only answer is the abolishment of the idea of a fellow human being as property.


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In the 1800’s, the abolitionist movement was extremely strong. One of the factors in the argument against slavery was the first hand narrative’s written by the actual slaves. Olaudah Equiano’s account of his treacherous voyage from the Western Coast of Africa to the Caribbean Island of Barbados is one such narrative that realizes the savagery of slavery. Abolitionists used narratives of all sorts to further their argument for the freedom of slaves. A personal account of the scents, sights, and stories aboard the ships.
Olaudah Equiano’s narrative details many of the hardships that were experienced in the voyage on a cramped ship for 6,000 miles. “The Stench of the hold while we were on the coast was so intolerably loathsome, that it was dangerous to remain there for any time” (p. 45). This extremely powerful exerpt from Equainos' narrative describes the harsh conditions under the deck on the ships that carried over 300 slaves in an area no larger then a medium sized apartment. Conditions such as these are not fit for any humans; humans have a basic right to live in proper conditions that are self controlled. Treating a fellow human being, whether it is a citizen of a poverty stricken country or me, as if he were a “good” is unforgivable by any religion in the land.
Throughout the journey, the white crewmen teased and tormented the helpless slaves as if they were animals, somehow lesser in creation. “One day they had taken a number of fishes; and when they killed and satisfied themselves with as many as they thought fit, to our astonishment who were on the deck, rather then give any of them to us to eat, as we expected, they tossed the remaining fish into the sea again” (p.46). The cruelty exhibited by these crewmen was absolute heresy. These actions were not even exhibited in modern prisons. “…although begged and prayed for some as well as we could, but in vain; and some of my country men, being pressed by hunger took an opportunity, when they thought no one saw them, of trying to get a little privately; but they were discovered, and the attempt procured them some very severe floggings” (p.46). Such torments are inhumane, corrupt and savage. To treat a starved, helpless person in such a manner is far below the standards of a developed society such as the Americas.
The life on board these ships was one filled with misery and heartbreak, with loved ones dying without any sort of health care. People soon turned to suicide attempts over such a morbid life. In one case, two fellow slaves, chained together in an attempt to keep them under control, jumped overboard, following by example, another man whom had jumped overboard. However, this man was not so lucky, as to escape this hell. He was recaptured and received severe beatings for his anarchy. The crewmen saw nothing of these humans; they only symbolized profit. If they invested less money on the well being of the individual slaves and focused on having a large amount of slaves, then they could maximize their gross profits. They largely went for quantity over quality, starving the slaves of basic nutrition for days on end, then beating those whom were on their death beds and begging for food.
The slave developed such a fear, “of the cruelty of the whites” (p.45). When they landed at Bridgetown, such a feeling was instilled upon them that, “We thought by this, we should be eaten by these ugly men.” With such savagery had the slaves been treated, that cannibalism seemed the next step to the ruination of a humane society. Through the eyes of an abolitionist, any such example proves the evils of slave trade, the political incorrectness that is slavery and the problem to which the only answer is the abolishment of the idea of a fellow human being as property.

There you go. The BOLD around the words symbolizes the words were wrong I changed them to fit the context. You used a lot of present-tense wording in a past-tense era. Everything needed to be in past-tense. Later, QD.

[Leisa]

good job Mike.. you are the shizznit!

[quickdodge®]

You're goddamn right. Lolol. Thank you, Leisa. Later, QD.

[Leisa]

hahahahaha

[brokecivic]

hey you forgot to indent the first word in the paragraph

[Hulud]

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[Kalifornia087]

leave it to QD to get shit done right

[A1EX]

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[quickdodge®]

I don't think so. That would be the guy whom I just helped. Later, QD.

[IndianStig]

You rock QD. +1 for you.

My teacher said to leave it in present tense.

[IndianStig]

Damn, i'll give you +1 l8r it say I gotta spread the love.

[JITB]

*cant read*

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I can understand what was in quotation being left in present tense because you were direcftly quoting someone. But to have your part in present doesn't make sense. If there is a way, could you find out why? I'm just curious. Later, QD.

[IndianStig]

I can understand what was in quotation being left in present tense because you were direcftly quoting someone. But to have your part in present doesn't make sense. If there is a way, could you find out why? I'm just curious. Later, QD.

I'll talk to my teacher and see why. But even my tenth grade teachers liked that.

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Tenth grade teacher liked what? Later, QD.

[D16Civic]

The only reason i can think you would keep everything in present tense would be if you were writing a book actually on a specific book because a book never goes away. Its always there so you always talk about in present tense. However, even tho it does seem hes talking about a book, its a past event that he writes most about so who knows, im kinda curious myself to know.