Quote Originally Posted by Vayda
I'd like to argue with you but I can't get past the grammar.

Sue me, I'm an honest-to-god English major.

Anyway can I proofread this for you? In the first paragraph I caught first person, misuse of commas, a sentence fragment that ended without punctuation (or a run on sentence, I can't make it out) and passive voice. It hurt my brain too much so I quit there.
sorry i'll run it through spell check real quick if you want but first person stays