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Ed
06-23-2009, 06:20 PM
help me re-write this:

After the study was completed by the research team and the results were published in the company newsletter the following month, the president decided to call a meeting of all senior level managers to discuss strategies for addressing problems highlighted by the research team.

winrar gets +19.

kthx

Scotsman
06-23-2009, 06:22 PM
i was gonna do it , but idc about the +19 (weaksos)

Ed
06-23-2009, 06:23 PM
i was gonna do it , but idc about the +19 (weaksos)

then don't, im not begging you.

Scotsman
06-23-2009, 06:23 PM
then don't, im not begging you.lol , do your own damn homework

Ed
06-23-2009, 06:24 PM
lol , do your own damn homework

i haz ia to halp. gtfo kthx

Scotsman
06-23-2009, 06:25 PM
i haz ia to halp. gtfo kthxbuhahahahaha

Echonova
06-23-2009, 06:27 PM
help me re-write this:

After the study was completed by the research team and the results were published in the company newsletter the following month, the president decided to call a meeting of all senior level managers to discuss strategies for addressing problems highlighted by the research team.

winrar gets +19.

kthxAFturr dee studie wuz compleet-ed bi da reserch kRew N da rezults weer publichd N da cumpanie newZledder da folowing mth, da pres de-sided two kall a meating uf all old manigers 2 dizcus stratergeries four addy problemz hi-lighted bi Da Nastyist Whipz kRew!!!!!

Ed
06-23-2009, 06:28 PM
how did i know i wasnt gonna get a straight answer....

where the fuck is qd

LizBiz
06-23-2009, 06:31 PM
I'm an English Major.....lets see what I can do.

WTF?
06-23-2009, 06:32 PM
^ lol

Echonova
06-23-2009, 06:32 PM
I'm an English Major.....lets see what I can do.Oh Lawd:lmfao:


I lub j00 Liz;)

Ed
06-23-2009, 06:32 PM
I'm an English Major.....lets see what I can do.

thats right woman....

when you're done get your ass back to the kitchen. no woman should be allowed in schools anyway, unless it's for a cooking, washing/ironing, cleaning major.

Scotsman
06-23-2009, 06:33 PM
thats right woman....

when you're done get your ass back to the kitchen. no woman should be allowed in schools anyway, unless it's for a cooking, washing/ironing, cleaning major.oh no you didnt

Ed
06-23-2009, 06:33 PM
lawl.

i luv you liz.

Echonova
06-23-2009, 06:34 PM
According to Microsoft Word 2007 it's correct. Bill Gates>college professor

Ed
06-23-2009, 06:35 PM
the sentence is correct, it's just too wordy.

Echonova
06-23-2009, 06:40 PM
After the study was completed by the research team the month prior, the results were published in the company newsletter. The president decided to call a meeting of all senior management to strategize for addressing problems areas highlighted by the research team.

LizBiz
06-23-2009, 06:41 PM
After the study was completed by the research team and the results were published in the company newsletter the following month, the president decided to call a meeting of all senior level managers to discuss strategies for addressing problems highlighted by the research team.

Upon the completion of the results strategically prepared by the research team, the finalized results were published in the company newsletter for the following month. The president organized a meeting of all senior level managers to discuss objective strategies for addressing issues emphasized by the research team.

BAM!!!

LizBiz
06-23-2009, 06:41 PM
TOO WORDY!?!?! You can NEVER have enough words......my bad....I added more words LOL

Echonova
06-23-2009, 06:42 PM
After the study was completed by the research team and the results were published in the company newsletter the following month, the president decided to call a meeting of all senior level managers to discuss strategies for addressing problems highlighted by the research team.

Upon the completion of the results strategically prepared by the research team, the finalized results were published in the company newsletter for the following month. The president organized a meeting of all senior level managers to discuss objective strategies for addressing issues emphasized by the research team.

BAM!!!And he thought it was wordy before...:lmfao:

Too slow I win

Ed
06-23-2009, 06:42 PM
i heartz you.

LizBiz
06-23-2009, 06:43 PM
After the study was completed by the research team and the results were published in the company newsletter the following month, the president decided to call a meeting of all senior level managers to discuss strategies for addressing problems highlighted by the research team.

Less words:

After the study was completed by the research team and the results were published in the company newsletter, the president decided to call a meeting to address problems highlighted by the research team.

Ed
06-23-2009, 06:43 PM
Revise the following wordy or choppy sentences into one coherent, effective sentence.\

this is what the instructions say, i think it looks good.

Echonova
06-23-2009, 06:45 PM
Ah.... I put a period in mine, but if you change it to a comma it's still grammatically correct.

LizBiz
06-23-2009, 06:46 PM
Revise the following wordy or choppy sentences into one coherent, effective sentence.\

this is what the instructions say, i think it looks good. Directions are awesome.

After the study was completed by the research team and the results were published in the company newsletter, the president decided to call a meeting to address problems highlighted by the research team.

That's 1 sentence!!!! woot!!

Echonova
06-23-2009, 06:49 PM
Directions are awesome.

After the study was completed by the research team and the results were published in the company newsletter, the president decided to call a meeting to address problems highlighted by the research team.

That's 1 sentence!!!! woot!!That ain't bad:goodjob:

Echonova
06-23-2009, 06:52 PM
I like how Ed gave directions AFTER the fact... That was a nice touch.

LizBiz
06-23-2009, 06:59 PM
I like how Ed gave directions AFTER the fact... That was a nice touch. I know right!!!!

Scotsman
06-23-2009, 07:01 PM
Ed you are gay for lockin this