Some lyrics i wrote....

[LS2ner]

I thought id share some **** i wrote awhile back. I know its prob dumb, but i figured i still share it.

The idea is a Taliban leader talking to a suicide bomber...

"The definition of this is the truth beyond the light
Yes theres a destination, but are you ready for that flight?
Are you ready to roll them dice?
Preparing all your life, are you ready to pay that price?
You only get one chance in the eyes of our lord
Send these infidels to the devil, push the button on the cord
Vindication, their souls will bleed from this report
Divine Manifestation, your life will be restored
And just as promised all these virgins will be yours
Religious Chess, whose keeping up the score?"


Seeing the positive response i got from this, i wrote a verse for it. You can call the part above an interlude if you would like. There is one more verse to come.

"Flash
Your eyes snap open
The planes about to crash, Theres no hope in controllin
It spirals downward, successful goal for these cowards
The war has begun, passengers bodies are about to shower
And cover the ocean, your adrenaline starts flowin
Your blood starts rushing, you can hear your heart thumpin
God help, you have to do something!
Your suppose to protect us
We liberated their people, why would they not respect us?
You fall to your knees, but there is no alter
You pray lord please, but why even bother?
Its already to late
The plane hits the water"

This is from the perspective of an american passenger. Next verse is of the bomber pre-explosion.

[MongolPup]

I want to post in here without flaming you just so that you won't only feel hate.

[LS2ner]

LOL, appreciate it.

Reps.

[Imadaman]

deep

[x Resilience]

deep

x2. Good sh!t. :goodjob:

[LS2ner]

Ill rep everyone i can, internet is slow so it may have to be at a later time.

[Motivation]

That is good material man... props

[Deke]

Good stuff man. I have to admit, I can't really picture what kind of song it would fit in though :)

[Motivation]

Might Just be lyrics for a poem...

[Deke]

Might Just be lyrics for a poem...

touche. That's honestly what I read it as, for some reason I just think "song" when I hear lyrics.

[Killer]

................ question...........


why would you write something "deep" about the commitment of being a suicide bomber???

[quickdodge®]

I thought id share some **** i wrote awhile back. I know its prob dumb, but i figured i still share it.

The idea is a Taliban leader talking to a suicide bomber...

"The definition of this is the truth beyond the light
Yes theres a destination, but are you ready for that flight?
Are you ready to roll them dice?
Preparing all your life, are you ready to pay that price?
You only get one chance in the eyes of our lord
Send these infidels to the devil, push the button on the cord
Vindication, their souls will bleed from this report
Divine Manifestation, your life will be restored
And just as promised all these virgins will be yours
Religious Chess, whose keeping up the score?"


I've wrote other stuff, but im thinking im gonna get alot of negative comments so i wont post that.

Nice shiit, driver. Later, QD.

[Magnus213]

................ question...........


why would you write something "deep" about the commitment of being a suicide bomber???
Because it's a deep thing for the suicide bombers in their point of view. It's a big deal, giving your life completely for your faith. In addition, writing anything (anything good at least) as an author from a completely foreign perspective than your own takes skill.

[itsnotarex]

Because it's a deep thing for the suicide bombers in their point of view. It's a big deal, giving your life completely for your faith. In addition, writing anything (anything good at least) as an author from a completely foreign perspective than your own takes skill.

This is entirely true.

And I honestly thought: "oh no this poor guy" when I saw the thread title but was completely pleasantly surprised by what I read. I really like it, dude!:goodjob:

And I could see it being an interlude of some kind in a song. Just a thought.

[quickdodge®]

Because it's a deep thing for the suicide bombers in their point of view. It's a big deal, giving your life completely for your faith. In addition, writing anything (anything good at least) as an author from a completely foreign perspective than your own takes skill.

Good response. Just because he wrote from the perspective of the "terrorist" doesn't mean he is supporting them. And like you said, nerd, to go from one culture to a (basically) different culture and capture the elements as well as LS2ner did, isn't just A b C's. Later, QD.

[osiriskidd]

good stuff

[Killer]

Because it's a deep thing for the suicide bombers in their point of view. It's a big deal, giving your life completely for your faith. In addition, writing anything (anything good at least) as an author from a completely foreign perspective than your own takes skill.

i didn't say it wasn't good.. nor that it didn't take skill...


BUT i don't think anyone BUT the author can answer my question of WHY it was written. unless he/she told you specifically why they wrote it.. it's only a question they can answer..

[quickdodge®]

A lot of people question what goes on in the minds of a suicide bomber. What makes them think what they think. Feel what they feel. It's just human nature no matter what the circumstance. This is what LS2ner was trying to express. He is showing what he perceives to be the thoughts/scriptures of a soldier of the Taliban army. Later ,QD.

[AtLRSX-S]

"The definition of this is the truth beyond the light
Yes theres a destination, but are you ready for that flight?
Are you ready to roll them dice?
Preparing all your life, are you ready to pay that price?
You only get one chance in the eyes of our lord
Send these infidels to the devil, push the button on the cord
Vindication, their souls will bleed from this report
Divine Manifestation, your life will be restored
And just as promised all these virgins will be yours
Religious Chess, whose keeping up the score?"


This key was nice. The flow was also good. Has a nice delivery to it. Style was nice, keep it up. Maybe when you write something else it would have a deeper meaning to it instead of this quick key. But nonetheless 7/10 Lookin forward to seeing you spit again

[blackboi50]

good sh!t dude........yo post up some more sh!t u got!!!......that sh!t was poetry homie :goodjob:;.....1

[LS2ner]

Appreciate all the positive responses guys! Will be issuing reps.

QD and Magnus hit the nail on the head. I was listening to Lupe Fiasco's "American Terrorist" when i wrote this. The words dont really fit into the breakdown of of the beat, but it was the "inspiration" for it.

The rest of the stuff i've written isn't exactly deep like that, just stuff i wrote.

[LS2ner]

So heres some more stuff i wrote. Its not anywhere close to what the other was lyrically.

For the record ive never sold crack, just know alot of people that have.

"Pardon the expression
But im this close to buying my pardon into Heaven
This close to bargainin' with these weapons
This dope, im tired of barterin' off these Wet-Ones
The next one arguein' can get to steppin'
Natural Selection
Yes, Im reppin the real folks strugglin'
The D-boys hustlin'
All while the Goverments gasoline guzzlin'
They Democrats or Republicans?
Who knows, they dont care so fucc em then
I see it how it was and you see it shouldve been
Ruffle them feathers and watch these bitches get shook
Insight, look in to find the mind of these crooks
Straight by the book
The Captain with no hook
Paparazzi screamin' trying to make the girls look
Schemin and plotting to get their pictures in a book"

I wrote that without any beat so im sure the flow is off some. Like i said, I know that it isnt on the same level lyrically as the other.

[LS2ner]

Issued reps to everyone i could, some of you it wouldnt let me. Im gonna work on a second verse for the orignal one. Maybe the thought process of the bomber before he actually goes through with the bombing will be the scheme.

[Killer]

^^^ i like that one man...

[LS2ner]

I got some more **** wrote to the original one i posted. Ill be adding it up later. Im kinda excited cuz i think its pretty good.

[quickdodge®]

You sposed to be on your way home man! Lolol. You still outside? Later, QD.

[LS2ner]

You sposed to be on your way home man! Lolol. You still outside? Later, QD.


Lol, was at the ATL terminal. Bout to post up the new shiit i wrote.

[Complete]

nice

[tubby]

thats preety dope do u have a clue on wat kinda beet ur gona put it to? would like to have that in to perspective, deep thoughts